Comments on: Chapter 29, First Draft (LAST CHAPTER!)

By: Sue

Sue — Tue, 12 Jan 2010 04:07:11 +0000

“But I know I just did what I had to do. It’s their problem if they invested in a bum deal. Even Anna, giving a year and a half of her life in a nursing home toward it. It was what she choose—I did not ask her for it. I should not feel guilty.”

“…It was what she choose – I did not…” change ‘choose’ to ‘chose’

“The frustration of now knowing surges in me, like relentless ocean waves on a million years of winter days. At the same time, insanity begins to send flames into my brain, threatening me, as if I am lost in the high desert with only skeletons as companions.”

“…The frustration of now knowing surges…” should ‘now’ be ‘not’?

YES! I knew this would happen. Basically similar to just turning around and not turning on *any* ob the burners. Better to turn them all on!! (hee hee) Oh too good, too good of an ending for Book One. Well done, dear Robin!!! (grin)

:~)

By: Sandy Phocas

Sandy Phocas — Fri, 08 Jan 2010 04:10:26 +0000

Love it! Really like the options she is given–and how she chooses outside of the presented options. I really appreciate Mayden’s strength and courage and determination. I look forward to more!

By: Vicki Lickorish

Vicki Lickorish — Fri, 01 Jan 2010 20:26:42 +0000

Great ending Robin… really makes you think… and really leaves you wanting more…
Well done to you for achieving you goal and thank you for sharing your work… so inspiring and helpful.
In anticipation of book two… Vicki.xx