Comments on: Chapter 28, First Draft http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/12/30/chapter-28-first-draft/ New Media Education On How To Write A Book Thu, 20 May 2010 00:01:32 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.1 hourly 1 By: Sue http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/12/30/chapter-28-first-draft/comment-page-1/#comment-7182 Sue Tue, 12 Jan 2010 03:47:49 +0000 http://www.maydenchronicles.com/?p=877#comment-7182 Ooh.. I am SO glad that this is but Book One!! (grin grin) "Looking into her yes, I see my final surprise: She is not hard and cold and ugly. She is beautiful. Utterly beautiful, even magically beautiful." "Looking into her yes, I..." change 'yes' to 'eyes' :~) Ooh.. I am SO glad that this is but Book One!! (grin grin)

“Looking into her yes, I see my final surprise: She is not hard and cold and ugly. She is beautiful. Utterly beautiful, even magically beautiful.”

“Looking into her yes, I…” change ‘yes’ to ‘eyes’

:~)

]]> By: Sandy Phocas http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/12/30/chapter-28-first-draft/comment-page-1/#comment-7098 Sandy Phocas Fri, 08 Jan 2010 04:06:03 +0000 http://www.maydenchronicles.com/?p=877#comment-7098 I love all that is revealed that we didn't know! I'm a bit confused, though, on what is going on with the betrayal--how they are betraying her exactly--or why she experiences it so *hugely* in that way. Would like a bit more about that. I love all that is revealed that we didn’t know! I’m a bit confused, though, on what is going on with the betrayal–how they are betraying her exactly–or why she experiences it so *hugely* in that way. Would like a bit more about that.

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