““He loves you. Fell in love the minute he saw you,” he says looking down at his place, then look up to send his eyes straight into mine, “just like I did.””

“….he says looking down at his place, ..” change ‘place’ to ‘plate’ also, change ‘look’ to ‘looks’

““Well, they told me, but… how do we know? Why can’t we all just learn together? And leave all that other love stuff for some other time? It’s all happening too fast, and there’s too many holes in it all, and….””

“…and there’s too many holes..” change ‘there’s’ to ‘there are’

“Michael looks at his plate again, sighs, then looks up at me once more. He stands and comes around to me, taking my hands and getting me to stand with him. Just like that, as if we were alone and not in a pubic restaurant, he pulls me close to him and kisses me.”

“…comes around to me, taking my hands and getting me to stand” perhaps taking out the ‘and’ and placing a comma after hands

“Her words give new meaning to the idea that someone can blow your mind. Because my mind, right now, seems to be in little bits all around the room, stuck on every corner, unable to comprehend anything in any cohesive manor.”

“..anything in any cohesive manor.” change ‘manor’ to ‘manner’

:~)

Thank you once again, Robin, for a wonderful story.