“Which leads to another problem. It wasn’t so easy keeping him from Bea all weekend. He wants to learn so bad you can see it killing him to stand back and get it second hand from me. But today he’ll be off to soccer camp again, and will be exhausted after. So everything should be quieter, all around.”

“….so bad you can see it killing him…” maybe add the word ‘is’ after ‘it’?

“Actually, I think it’s just that Dad and Sally are just reaching that time in all his relationships when things fall to crap. So far, they have all gone on pretty much the same schedule. Except for my mom. She was different, he said, though he didn’t really explain. I like to think maybe it was her having me that was what was different, but I don’t really know, and Dad doesn’t say. As much as I don’t overly like Sally, I kind of hope they aren’t going to get a divorce. I don’t like the idea of getting a new one broken in, and moving, and then redecorating, and all the stuff that comes with Dad getting married again. Besides, it just can’t be good for Dad.”

“….like to think that maybe it was her having me that was what was different…” Hmmm..had to read it twice…and then when putting it here it does sound okay…but wondering maybe if it said it like, “…like to think that maybe it was her having me that made the difference, but I don’t….” ? :~)

“Heading into her room with a quick nock, I find she is much as she always is: Head bobbing; a little drool. But she is sitting up in her wheelchair, not flat out in bed. I don’t even bother to talk to her beyond a loud, fake “Hello Mrs. Bayless” before getting her medicine bag and heading her out the door. We’ve plenty to say to each other, and if there is one thing I have learned, it’s best not to have it happen anywhere near the inside of these walls.”

“…with a quick nock, …” change ‘nock’ to ‘knock’

“I nod, thinking that’s what I miss fromAnna. Bea is smart, and good at working with Magic. But Anna is wise in a completely different way. She makes me feel like I’ll be protected, and all Bea makes me feel is overwhelmed.”

“…what I miss fromAnna.” space between ‘from’ and ‘Anna’. :~)

““What IS Magic, anyway?” I finally say, if only to break the silence. “I don’t understand, it being female or even like a person at all. I thought it was a force or something more like that.””

(blush…probably nit-picky on this one) “What IS Magic, anyway?” I finally say, .. <– change 'say' to 'ask'. :~)

"“I see it now,” Anna says, back as quick as she left. “A chandelier with many crystals. The great power of the Universe is the chandelier. From it hang so many forms of magic, but not only that. All religion, and all forms of goodness, and badness for that matter. All manner of things which conduct and carry the power of the Universe out into the world. Our Magic is one stunning crystal on that great plugged-in appliance that leads straight to the One source, and ours happens to be feminine. She carries the force of magic within her, but she is not the source. Not the ultimate source.”"

"…From it hang so many…" change 'hang' to 'hangs'

"“This knowing isn’t about learning,” she says, again fierce. “It is about what is true. All you have to learn is what you know. Truly know. And how to access what you know. What is true, at lest for you. I fully agree that the others have more education and experience than you, and that is worthy of respect. But each and every person has access to their own knowing, and that must not be compromised. Stay open to being taught, of course. But remember that teaching is to lead you to knowing. It would be wrong to give what you already know to someone else’s knowing, even in part, in order to learn more first.”"

"…What is true, at lest for you." change 'lest' for 'least'

"Okay, that is so out in left field. There is now way I’m finger-wrestling an 88-year-old mostly-invalid out in the woods. I cock an eyebrow at her."

"…There is now way…" change 'now' to 'no'

:~)

So – I’m appreciating the content and juice. and depth. LOVE the finger wrestling!

I might like to see a bit of action amidst all this teaching. For example, getting down on the dirt and having a cricket join the conversation, or a tree root. Or, as MAyden “swallows” the worlds of lessons inside her, maybe there is a moment of time travel, or space travel and she and Anna are whisked away somewhere – maybe churning butter together in a castle, while talking/teaching… or picking berries together 600 years ago…. More action, as those GOOD concepts roll out, would help the story roll a little easier, for me.

Most of all, I love that the future vision is what is speaking, and calling for action. YESSSSSSSSSSS!
lots of love, T

This is just a great reminder for me! I see Mayden “learning magic” as diving into the well of Mystery that is flowing through her… She’s getting to know herself at a deep level and learning what she’s capable of. Probably more than she ever thought possible! What she dresses herself in doesn’t matter as much… ahhhh….

“It would be wrong to give what you already know to someone else’s knowing, even in part, in order to learn more first.”

I have a question… How can you give your knowing to someone else? Is it like not listening to your own knowing in order to learn something from someone else?

This chapter is amazing and very timely for me…

Pat