Comments on: Chapter Eighteen, First Draft

By: Sue

Sue — Sun, 10 Jan 2010 03:23:02 +0000

(rofl) Love it!! You had me going back to chapter 17 thinking, “Wait a minute…didn’t this just happen??” (hee hee)

““You said you realized why out on the soccer field. You told me all about how you tune into the zone and you just know things. You said the spoons didn’t work because of the leather bag Bea gave you and then you showed me how you could do the spinning with the bag off, but not on.””

Last part…not sure if this matters much, but Mayden says, “….leather bag Bea gave you ***and then you showed me how you could do the spinning with the bag off, but not on.****”….. This last part doesn’t really happen in the last chapter…so not sure if the reader will just assume that he does show or?? (blush)

““Not like you think,” she assures. “Magic is also female. It seeks to have a mirror to look into, so to speak. It seeks a beautiful, young, feminine face to imagine is it’s own.””

“…imagine is it’s own.” Change ‘it’s’ to ‘its’.

:~)

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Thu, 24 Sep 2009 22:32:55 +0000

Thank you Zarinah! It makes the writing worthwhile to have readers following… Hugs!

By: Zarinah

Zarinah — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 14:35:38 +0000

This is my first time visiting your site! Thanks for sharing your talents with us

By: Nadine

Nadine — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 15:30:16 +0000

Great chapter as always.”Magic has found you, and chosen you.”-so exciting! I’m really enjoying where the whole magic thing is going. Although I never thought magic had a gender I kinda like how you decided to make magic feminine. I also Can’t wait for more.

By: Alesia

Alesia — Wed, 17 Jun 2009 21:04:32 +0000

It’s becoming increasingly easier to imagine Magic as a person in itself. I love how Magic is described.
Can’t wait for more!

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 13:08:23 +0000

Hello Maran! Yes, Magic is in all ages… no doubt! I guess in this story, it wants Mayden for her fresh beauty… but all faces are welcome! Glad you are enjoying!

By: Maran

Maran — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 13:02:36 +0000

I once imagined I was a beautiful, young, feminine face.
Becoming The Crone, growing into a wise woman I know now,
that I am as Magic is something far more grand than a reflection.
I am enchanted to be seeing Magic through this mystical tale you are weaving Wise One.
Safe journeys.

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 11:52:42 +0000

I’m loving where this is going too… Magic is stepping up to the plate! I’m as much along for the ride as the rest of you! Yahooo!

By: Mary Agner

Mary Agner — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 11:33:59 +0000

Oh Robin, what a treat! I didn’t expect another chapter before you leave. I had to read it right away, which totally messes up my schedule for the day, and so worth it! “The cost of resisting what magic wants is high.” Love it!

By: Sandy Phocas

Sandy Phocas — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 03:41:30 +0000

I am so loving this, Robin! I can’t believe I’ll have to wait longer for the next chapter!