Comments on: Chapter 15, First Draft http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/05/17/chapter15/ New Media Education On How To Write A Book Sun, 31 Jul 2011 00:22:14 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.4.2 By: Sue http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/05/17/chapter15/comment-page-1/#comment-7123 Sue Sat, 09 Jan 2010 03:16:31 +0000 http://www.maydenchronicles.com/?p=652#comment-7123 Mayden's truly living a magical summer!! “She said that it was one thing to be able to spin spoons when there is nothing working against you,” Michael repeats, try again to bob and spin the spoon, “but another when someone or something is in the way.” Change 'try' to 'trying'. "Michael nods, reaching over to add a little more peanut butter to his rice cake then I put there. " Change: "...to his rice cake then I..." 'then' to 'than' "I have to think on this, and what he said last night. If he is the superior to Jake, and there is no competition, why would he care if I liked Jake better than him? I’d ask, but I’m not sure I want to know. At least not yet." "....If he is the superior to..." delete "the" :~) Mayden’s truly living a magical summer!!

“She said that it was one thing to be able to spin spoons when there is nothing working against you,” Michael repeats, try again to bob and spin the spoon, “but another when someone or something is in the way.”

Change ‘try’ to ‘trying’.

“Michael nods, reaching over to add a little more peanut butter to his rice cake then I put there. ”

Change: “…to his rice cake then I…” ‘then’ to ‘than’

“I have to think on this, and what he said last night. If he is the superior to Jake, and there is no competition, why would he care if I liked Jake better than him? I’d ask, but I’m not sure I want to know. At least not yet.”

“….If he is the superior to…” delete “the”

:~)

]]> By: Tiffany Montavon http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/05/17/chapter15/comment-page-1/#comment-1270 Tiffany Montavon Wed, 27 May 2009 16:50:03 +0000 http://www.maydenchronicles.com/?p=652#comment-1270 Life is so interesting when we find "our people" or "our allies" - - and it really can happen in three days! I love the sensation of having a few conversations with people, and sensing - "s/he gets it. gets me. I am supported by him/her knowing who I am" - - kinda changes the world, actually. Life is so interesting when we find “our people” or “our allies” – - and it really can happen in three days! I love the sensation of having a few conversations with people, and sensing – “s/he gets it. gets me. I am supported by him/her knowing who I am” – - kinda changes the world, actually.

]]> By: Pat http://www.maydenchronicles.com/2009/05/17/chapter15/comment-page-1/#comment-1085 Pat Sat, 23 May 2009 02:00:15 +0000 http://www.maydenchronicles.com/?p=652#comment-1085 Great chapter! I liked the dialog between Mayden and Michael... alittle more insight into their connection! I loved the reference of how life is suddenly changing so quickly for Mayden... I've certainly have had that kind of experience before too. There's no turning back either. These are the kinds of experiences that will change her life forever. Love it! Pat Great chapter! I liked the dialog between Mayden and Michael… alittle more insight into their connection! I loved the reference of how life is suddenly changing so quickly for Mayden… I’ve certainly have had that kind of experience before too. There’s no turning back either. These are the kinds of experiences that will change her life forever.

Love it!

Pat

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