Comments on: Chapter Two: First Draft

By: Shirin Meiners

Shirin Meiners — Fri, 27 Feb 2009 20:58:53 +0000

Love the anticipation! I can’t wait to see the “plan” unfold!

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Fri, 06 Feb 2009 12:47:23 +0000

Thanks, Starra, I’ll be interested to learn what you think about the “sacred space” aspect after chapter three… really, really apprecitate you all posting your thoughts..it eggs me on!

By: Starra

Starra — Thu, 05 Feb 2009 22:43:49 +0000

I wasn’t too surprised when Anna began speaking, because when they got to the forest – I thought perhaps they were in a sacred space that she connected with. Something like that.

Love it! On to chapter three

By: antyelowboy

antyelowboy — Thu, 05 Feb 2009 01:55:21 +0000

Great story, I’m in thankful stage “>

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Wed, 21 Jan 2009 22:00:29 +0000

Way cool… writing is my first priority tomorrow!

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Wed, 21 Jan 2009 19:40:22 +0000

I agree, Moquistone, that Anna talked a bit too soon… I was surprised about that too. But there is a reason, and once chapter three is written, I think it will bear out, and then can be worked with on edits of 1, 2 and 3. Thanks!

By: Robin Rice

Robin Rice — Wed, 21 Jan 2009 19:37:47 +0000

Thanks for the edit… that helps! Robin

By: Lynn Bucks

Lynn Bucks — Wed, 21 Jan 2009 19:25:14 +0000

I am right there in the woods with Mayden and Anna and I can’t wait to see what secrets unfold.

By: Tena Moore

Tena Moore — Tue, 20 Jan 2009 16:42:32 +0000

I’m on the edge of my seat. This is a really great second chapter. I did see one edit. It says:

I also hope it hels that her meds are running out.

Instead of ‘I also hope is helps….’

By: moquistone

moquistone — Fri, 16 Jan 2009 18:47:51 +0000

I really felt the tension building as Mayden describes the trip out of the nursing home. I had a little bit of difficulty with Anna going from grunts to full sentences so quickly — I know Mayden says that Anna’s speech is garbled while she is at the home —- but it felt a little too quick for her speech to clear (this is not a big deal, it just seemed too quick)